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Morning~AmyLee要认真规划好备考的每一天，你呢！非常感谢大家的陪伴，我们YY可可备考小组的成员越来越多了，不许偷懒，托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦，写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批，共同进步!^^
我已经托福三战过了，对考试各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以发邮件给我，我会尽力为大家解答。
每天的写作任务是这样的，写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱（如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明），我们将进入互批作文模式。
在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲，请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较，找出自己的不足之处。开始吧！
16. It has recently been announced that a newrestaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose thisplan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
参考分析： 社区内的餐馆越多，竞争就越激烈，那么价钱就会更公道；可能会出现卫生问题；也可能有客人酗酒闹事(excessive drinking; get drunk and create a disturbance; make trouble after getting drunk.)。 参见：[5]。 |
16、同意新饭馆建立 |
Topic 16 A new restaurant in your neighborhood
A new restaurant in my neighborhood would be the most exciting eventfor me. I personally have positive feelings towards this proposal（建议）and also believe that the people of my neighborhood shall also feelexcited about such an event.（不要再用agree了，换一种说法吧，像文中的这样feel excited about也明确地表达了作者的看法）
Life in the fast lane（这里指的是快节奏的生活）today has turned out to be sohectic（翻译成忙碌的）and tedious（枯燥冗长的）to us that at times we feelexhausted and therefore unwilling to prepare our food. We also feel a strongurge towards a change in the type and flavor（调料）of foodthat we eat. A new restaurant at such times nearby shall make a difference toour lives.（作者首先用紧张和枯燥的生活作铺垫，从而提出一个新的餐厅换换口味可以改变生活滋味）
In occasions of（就……而言）happiness, get-togethers andenjoyment, having a restaurant nearby is always a convenience for people here.For example, the restaurant can be a convenient place to hold a weddingreception, or a birthday ceremony.（一个餐厅还可以有很多用途，从而给人们带来聚餐的愉快与幸福）
A new restaurant shall certainly add lots of enthusiasms（热情）and excitements to people here and people who have the greatest amountof enjoyment would be the younger people. They can relax in a new environmentwith the experience of a new atmosphere and people around and most of all,tasting something new. On the other hand, a new restaurant in our neighborhoodgives hope to young people who would like to make money through a part time orfull time job.（新建餐厅可以带来商机）
In conclusion, a new restaurant will bring convenience to ourcommunity. So I personally welcome such a plan.
好了，今天就说这么多，大家一定要坚持练习作文，每天进步一小点，一个月下来托福写作绝对是质的提升！希望大家跟着我每天一篇练下去，写作都是硬功夫，跟小时候每周都要写语文作文是一样的，功夫到家自然成，加油！
最后再mention一下互评作文的事情，这个作文互评目前只有我在做，我希望尽可能给有需要的可可粉们提供帮助，如果你们中有愿意跟我一起批改大家作文的，一定要mail我加入哦！（互批可以进步非常快，做过才知道！）
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