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Morning~AmyLee要认真规划好备考的每一天，你呢！非常感谢大家的陪伴，我们YY可可备考小组的成员越来越多了，不许偷懒，托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦，写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批，共同进步!^^
我已经托福三战过了，对考试各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以发邮件给我，我会尽力为大家解答。
每天的写作任务是这样的，写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱（如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明），我们将进入互批作文模式。
在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲，请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较，找出自己的不足之处。开始吧！
21. In general, people are living longer now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
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21、人们寿命延长的原因在于 |
Topic 21 Why do people live longer?
With the development of human society, people are living longer now.Many factors interact together to enable a longer life. There are three most important causes: the quality of food has been greatly improved; people could have access to medical services; more and more people realize that regular sports benefit their health.
The improving quality of our food is the most important factor of the longer life. We could have not only enough food as we want, but also more healthier food. When we preparing food, we no longer consider the cost, but pay more attention to the nutritious value of the food. With the development of transportation systems, inland people now could also enjoy seafood and tropical fruit（热带水果）.
Furthermore, governments are paying more and more money on medical establishments. Citizens could have access to medical services more easily.Because of the convenient medical service, more illnesses could be detected at an earlier stage. Also, many illnesses that had been considered fatal（致命的）could becured（治愈）today.The better detection and cure enable people's longer life.
Last but not least, people care more for their own health.Every morning you could see people doing sports outside.More and more people have realized the saying “life is in motion."（好用的俗语，生命在于运动）Regular sports build up a strong body.Naturally, people with stronger body could resist more diseases.
To sum up, the development of our society ensures that people have longer life. People now enjoy better food and better medical services, and they spend more time on sports and exercises to build up stronger bodies. As we could predict, people are going to live even longer in the future.
好了，今天就说这么多，大家一定要坚持练习作文，每天进步一小点，一个月下来托福写作绝对是质的提升！希望大家跟着我每天一篇练下去，写作都是硬功夫，跟小时候每周都要写语文作文是一样的，功夫到家自然成，加油！
最后再mention一下互评作文的事情，这个作文互评目前只有我在做，我希望尽可能给有需要的可可粉们提供帮助，如果你们中有愿意跟我一起批改大家作文的，一定要mail我加入哦！（互批可以进步非常快，做过才知道！）
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