1.第1句中“原名铁木真”作为插人语,用originallynamed Temujin来表达。
2.第2句“他是……军事家”是对成吉思汗的总体评价,并非介绍其生平事迹,故应该用一般现在时。
3.在第4句中,中文有两个动作“发动”和“征服”,后者“以征服其他国家”表目的,故处理为in order to的目的状语,“发动战争”处理为句子的谓语。
4.第5句“他带领的……,并给……”由两个分句构成,语义并列,故可处理为并列结构,译作his army had captured... and brought serious damage to...;也可将后半句处理成分词短语 bringing great damage to...作结果状语;后半句还可用非限制性定语从句to which serious damage was also brought来表达。
5.倒数第2句中,“成吉思汗是……,同时又是……”使用not only... but also的句式来表达。此处出现两个“人物”,分别用figure和character来表达,避免重复。
6.翻译最后一句时,用现在完成进行时来表达从过去到现在一直持续的动作,译作Forhundreds of years, scholars at home and overseas have been studying...? “成吉思汗的功过是非”可译为 the rights and wrongs of Genghis Khan,但不如译作 Genghis Khan on his rights and wrongs 表达得更为确切。