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Writing An Essayand Conclusion
海外大学教师谢振礼谈论说文中冲突的抽象化
英文作文=英文+作文
雅思IELTS的独立写作Independent Writing Tasks是测验【英文+作文=英文作文】。候选人培训写作单项，又学作文【舞其圆】又学英文【练其道】。学作文与英文的知识而又能灵活使用便是【悟其禅】——作文无中生有，英文去杂存清。作文的亮点为圆形逻辑，包挂主题结构内容——主题有焦点，结构有组织，内容有支持。英文的亮点是文法规矩，包含修辞句法词汇——用语求效率，用句求变化，用字求恰当。英文作文的静虑运用——利用抽象的语言处理议论文的唯一题型：冲突。禅的顿悟也许只可意会而难以言传。
从议论文的开头说起。作文中常用的【起承转合】中起段引言最难写。如果开头写三句话，又是开头第一句话最难写，也是最重要。成功的第一句导致成功的第一段。成功的起段可以保证成功的合段，因为合段结尾三句话只是后应起段的前呼三句话，所以只要照抄，注意句子次序颠倒就行了，了不起换一些不同的字汇与句型。旧八股说【起中有合】，【合中有起】也就是如此。中体的承段与转段来龙自起段，去脉则到合段。全文从哪里开始也就在哪里结尾，刚好绕360度一圈。
What are the pros and cons of co-educational schooling? Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Provide reasons and examples from your knowledge and experience.
起段开头三句话 Introduction: from general to specific
I. 申论主题——中学男女合校制度利少弊多 Stating your thesis
The effort to introduce female students into male secondary schools, or vice versa, must be regarded as undesirable because the practice has not been working well.
II. 集中焦点——立场的冲突 Narrowing your thesis into your focus
Beyond the religious and cultural grounds, there are other issues about co-education that need to be analyzed.
III. 一分为二——道德败坏，学业退步 Organizing your focus into points of conflict
Of all the obvious drawbacks about mixed-sex educational system, the decline of moral principles and the fall of academic performance have raised particular concern.
合段结尾三句话 Conclusion: from specific to general
I. 二合为一：道德败坏，学业退步 Summarizing points of view into your focus
Not surprisingly, from the moral or academic point of view, voices are increasingly being heard to escalate support for single-sex schooling.
II. 还原焦点：立场的冲突 Widening your focus to the scope of your thesis
It has been more evident that to sacrifice physical and mental differences for artificial gender equality is probably not the right policy to run teenage education in general.
III. 重申主题：男女合校坏处多 Restating your thesis
As can be imagined, sending immature boys and girls to attend the co-ed schools is likely to cause hidden costs to society
经济利益与环境保护的冲突
Today food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?
开头三句话 Introduction: from general to specific
申论主题=真题加立场
集中焦点=立场的冲突
一分为二=分别的议论
The food travel debate is inevitably intertwined between economic interests and environmental concerns. While food is traveling because transport has become so cheap in a world of globalization, the manner by which food is being carried is not doing the natural environment any favors. The question is whether to meet human food demand or to reduce pollution?
结尾三句话 Conclusion: from specific to general
二合为一=论点的归纳
还原焦点=立场的冲突
重申主题=立场加真题
In view of both the positive side and negative side about long-distance food transportation, there seems no easy answer to the question. Nevertheless, it is up to consumers to make choices, knowing where food comes from. Buying local produce not only supports local farmers but also provides dinner tables with the freshest and most nutrient-packed options.
工作满意与工作保障的冲突
Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.
开头三句话 Introduction: from general to specific
No employee could possibly feel happy about a small chance of losing the current job anytime soon. Next only to pay, job security is certainly the No. 1 factor leading to job satisfaction in the modern workplace. In view of increasing unemployment rates these days, not being able to keep a job may mean the absence of he monthly income on which much of job satisfaction depends.
结尾三句话 Conclusion: from specific to general
For workers in general to feel happy and secure, it is important to maintain a sense of job security and job satisfaction. Since money is by far the most important factor that people work, job security is what matters to most workers. Nevertheless, those who can take job security for granted may begin planning how to pass their happy years after retirement.
收入与支出的冲突
People in developing countries are happier than before while people in developed countries are no happier than they used to be. Why? What lesson can you learn from it?
—Introduction: from general to specific
Financially speaking, people are supposed to be happier when their incomes exceed expenses, but the reverse is happening to many people in some developed countries. In comparison, people in some developing countries with a much lower measure of per capita income appear to be happier in what they actually are able to buy within their earnings. The lesson seems clear enough: higher living standards do not necessarily add to happiness but excessive spending can certainly undermine it.
—Conclusion: from specific to general
To sum up, the only way to avoid being unhappy in life, whether referring to a developed country or a developing country, is to have happy thoughts about living within their means and having something to hope for. Per capita income can no longer be the only measure for economic happiness, judging from the fact that people in developed countries are not as happy as they used to be. Without any doubt, the lesson about being happy is for an individual as well as for a country to perform a balancing act between incomes and expenses.
男人与女人工作机会的冲突
Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
开头三句话：Introduction: from general to specific
It is generally agreed that men and women are created equal but they have different missions in life due mainly to different biological inclinations. This leads one to believe that some specific jobs better fit either males or females only, with people of both sexes doing what they do best. Although the gender issue in terms of work opportunities and income disparities still exists today, no one should ever imagine changing the charm that belongs to women and the strength to men.
结尾三句话：Conclusion: from specific to general
Other things being equal, the paradox seems to be that just as charm can be women's strength, men's charm can be strength. Besides, one should accept the fact that the quality of employment depends as much on biological differences as on qualification similarities. In real life, neither gender is the weak sex.
禁止与不禁止的冲突
Films and computer games with violence are very popular in the world. Some people believe that these have negative effects on society. Other people say these are just harmless relaxations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
