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淡化雅思文章模板痕迹:双边结构写作

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  b. 转折过渡+提出观点

  However, everything is mixed blessing. Employing children to work should be viewed as a harsh treatment and abuse to them. Kids, after all, unlike adults, are immature both physically and psychologically. They are extremely vulnerable to both occupational hazards and social evils. More importantly, children are at the golden age for learning not only due to their brain structure but also their curiosity and desire for knowledge. It goes without saying that the silly action permitting children to work for financial reasons is ridiculous.

  双边结构的第二段要论述对立面的观点,但是不同于上一段的是,此段不仅要充分的客观陈述一种观点同时还要带有观点倾向,因为要完成文章的第二个任务---提出自己的观点。笔者认为这样的观点提法比较自然,不需要另起一段提出而显得比较呆板。

  3. 结尾段

  模板语言:

  In the final analysis, I concede that to some extent whether the ultimate effect of phenomena is good or not, one thing is certain that phenomenon in itself is neither good nor bad. And it is the uses to which it is put that determine its value to society. I am convinced that___________.  

非模板语言:

  In conclusion, although there lies various excuses for letting the young children work for salary, it is pointless that this way could benefit them in terms of accumulating work experience and learning the meaning of responsibility. (自然流露观点倾向)

  作为双边结构作文的结尾,需要总结全文,即主体段两段的大意,同时要结合题目本身的特点提出鲜明的个人观点。

  三、 总结

  和上篇文章一样,雅思专家建议各位考生:不要盲目追求所谓模板,要注重灵活度。笔者认为,中国考生写作得分低,除了语法这个大问题以外,其实一味背诵模板甚至随处套用所谓“万能模板”是丢分的一大原因。写作的最高境界就是把各种连接化于无形,实现语义的自然衔接。考生必须根据考题的要求,调用自己原有的语言配上正确的语法,使作文具有鲜明的个人特色,侃侃而谈。在考场中,拉近与考官的距离而不是设置一道冷冰冰的“模板墙”。

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ridiculous [ri'dikjuləs]

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adj. 荒谬的,可笑的

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dependence [di'pendəns]

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n. 依赖,信赖,上瘾

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harsh [hɑ:ʃ]

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adj. 粗糙的,使人不舒服的,刺耳的,严厉的,大约的

 
occupational [.ɔkju'peiʃnl]

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adj. 职业的

 
analysis [ə'næləsis]

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n. 分析,解析

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certain ['sə:tn]

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adj. 确定的,必然的,特定的
pron.

 
priority [prai'ɔriti]

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n. 优先权,优先顺序,优先

 
concede [kən'si:d]

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vt. 承认,给予
vi. 让步

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social ['səuʃəl]

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adj. 社会的,社交的
n. 社交聚会

 
abuse [ə'bju:s,ə'bju:z]

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n. 滥用,恶习
vt. 滥用,辱骂,虐待

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