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Alarmingly， we, human beings, have been facing a series of environment-related issues, especially energy scarcityalthough our economy keeps on soaring. Considering the severity of energy crisis, an opinion seems to become prevalent that efforts should be made to find and harness new natural resources, such as gas or oil, in some remote or unexploited places. I hold positive attitude. The merits of exploring untapped natural resources prevail over its possible downsides.
翻译：令人担忧的是，经管经济发展，但是人类面对着一系列的与环境先关的问题，尤其是能源危机。考虑到能源危机的严重性，一种观点变得流行起来，人们应该在遥远的没有被开发的地区研发新能源(例如：石油，天然气)。我持有乐观态度，我认为开发新区域能源的利大于弊。
点评：个性开篇， 主题明确：用到现在完成进行时，插入语。
点评：harness v利用(尤其指的自然能源;用词准确)。
二段：利好的展开：支持开发新能源
First，a great many countries have been now undertaking the exploration of new energies in some remote rural areas. Indeed, numerous benefits could be gained. Specifically, it will enrich our knowledge about the energy exploration. Although human beings have been living on the earth for thousands of years, we know very little about it.For example, we are not even sure about whether there are new energies on other places. The attempt to explore will certainly help us answer all these questions. Also, the exploitation of natural resources may help ease the energy crisis.Virtually, our oil, coal, and other conventional fuels will be exhausted in the near future. Although the scientists are looking for alternatives on the earth, such as nuclear power, we may endeavor to harness the oil or gas in untouched places, where natural resources might be abundant and untapped. Last，although we have tried various means to relieve the burden of energy shortage，the best way, however, is to turn our eyes to untouched places. Some scientists are already working on the possible exploration in remote rural areas.
第一，很多国家一直在进行一些偏远乡村地区的新能源的开发。的确，利好很多。具体而言，这项事业丰富了人们对于能源开始的知识，经管人们在地球生活了很久，但是，我们对于地球的了解不多，我们不知道是否其他的区域还有新能源，能源探索可以回答这些问题。第二，自然能源的开发可以缓解能源危机，实际上，我们的石油，天然气以及传统能源在未来会被耗尽，经管我们的科学家做出努力研发可替代能源，例如核能，但是我们应该努力去开发新区域的能源，这些地区的能源也许是丰富的没有被开发的。最后，经管我们努力去缓解能源危机的压力，但是，最好的方式就是将目光集中到没有被开发的地区，有些科学家已经在进行遥远地区的可能的能源探索。
点评：主题思想是开发新能源是可以缓解能源危机，细节就是丰富能源开发的知识，缓解了能源危机的压力。第三，对比其他方式，开采没有被开发的领域的新能源是最好的方式。
点评：三点利好以及细节的充分的展开;弊端就是没有想到更好的论据。
三段：弊端的展开
As a proverb goes, there is no garden without weeds. Seen from the negative aspects, some potential problems should be stressed. For one thing, being extremely time-consuming and energy-consuming, the exploration of new energies in remote areas might end up becoming a huge waste of money and other resources if it is not properly designed and rationally executed. For another, over time, reservoirs age and go into decline and so lifting oil becomes more expensive, oil or gas from that area then becomes less competitive. Consequently, production of energy slows down.
翻译：正如谚语说法;凡事有利弊(没有不长杂草的花园)从消极方面看，有些问题是应该被强调的。第一，因为能源开发是耗时耗力的，所以如果没有被合理设计以及理性执行，偏远地区的新能源的开发可能变成是金钱和其他资源的浪费。第二，久而久之，石油资源会枯竭和减产，到时，开发石油价格昂贵，到时，该区域的石油或天然气就逐渐失去竞争力，因此，能源会减产。
尾段：作家立场
In closing， those who only see the financial and material resources used for this undertaking are near-sighted. Would they leave the earth in a state of energy shortage, and severe pollution? Would they remain ignorant of the earth upon which human beings depend for survival? If not, they should change their position and support the scheme for energy exploration in some untouched areas.
翻译：哪些只是看到了能源开发的经济和资源投入的人是目光短浅的，有人愿意看到我们的地球出现能源危机和严重的污染的状态吗?有人愿意对我们赖以生存的地区保持无知吗?如果不是，他们应该改变立场，支持没有被开发地区的能源开采计划。
写作心得：6月28日写作题目为新题出现，思路拓展起初不是完全清晰，写作进行中，灵感慢慢出现。语料库不难写作，写作中注意词汇变化，主句从句写作，由于该题目超越了学生思考的范畴，和能源，科技，环保相互关联，写作有难度。
