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Too many ideas, so, this basically goes in line with the topic... no topic sentence.
太多想法基本上就等于没有主题句。
So then, okay, they know what he likes, what he doesn't like, his books, etc.
那么，他们知道他喜欢什么，他不喜欢什么，他的书等等。
They can also talk to the child's teachers and find out how they can help him.
他们还可以跟孩子的老师交谈，弄清楚他们怎样才能帮助他。
Okay, that's another way they can do, so, teachers have nobody to ask, or maybe they have the parents, who knows?
好的，这是他们能采取的另一种方式，老师没有人可以问，或者也许他们能问家长，谁知道呢。
So, parents know their child best, parents can talk to the child's teachers,
所以，家长最了解他们的孩子，家长能跟孩子的老师交谈，.
they can find...they can monitor how much TV he watches, so they can... this is something else they can do, doesn't have anything to do with what he likes or doesn't like.
他们能发现.....他们能监督他看多少电视，这样他们就能......这是他们能做的另一件事，跟他喜欢或不喜欢什么没有任何关系。
They can concen-... they can help his concentration by cutting down on TV, too many ideas, here.
他们能......他们能通过减少他看电视的量帮助他集中注意力，这里的想法太多了。
Now, too many ideas is not a bad thing if each idea is expanded on, you elaborate, you explain why this is important, and you have to connect. Right?
如果每个想法都得到了扩展，你们详细描述了、解释了为什么这一点很重要的话，太多想法也不是件坏事，你们必须要把它们关连起来。
Every sentence must flow in terms of ideas, logically, from one idea to the next.
每个句子必须按照想法流通，有逻辑地从一个想法过渡到下一个。
So, here, this...this sentence and this sentence really have no connection, here, we're talking about what he likes; here about what they can do with their teachers.
所以，这里，这个句子和这个句子真的一点连结都没有，这里我们讲的是他喜欢什么，这里讲的是他们和老师能干什么。
Two completely separate ideas, not connected by anything. Okay?
两个完全不同的想法，没有被任何事情连结起来。
Next, they can talk about TV, they can cut down on TV. Okay.
接下来，他们可以讲讲电视，他们可以减少看电视的量。
What does that have to do with talking to the child's teachers?
那和跟孩子的老师交谈有什么关系？
Nothing, again, no connection, different idea.
没有关系，再说一次，没有联系，不同的想法。
So the reader is going: "Umm, what are you trying to do here, like, what... what is the purpose of this essay, what is the purpose of this paragraph?"
于是读者会想：“嗯......你在这里想干什么？这篇文章的目的是什么？这一段的目的是什么？”
The point is you're trying to support your idea, why you think parents are the best teacher.
重点是你们要努力支持自己的想法，说明你们为什么认为家长是最好的老师。
Don't just throw in ideas, which brings us to point number four:
不要光把想法扔进来，这就把我们带到了第四点：
Good point... so, you're making good points, there's nothing wrong with the ideas, here; they're actually quite good, quite strong in terms of supporting your opinion.
言之有理......所以你们要言之有理，这些想法没有问题，它们实际上非常好，在支持你们的观点方面相当有力。
