今天我们来继续学习怎样起草和修改信件。

Drafting: How To Do It

LETTER TO MR PERRY: DRAFTING 

Now that you know what drafting is all about, you can draft the letter to Mr Perry.

To do this, you need to have your plan with you so you can write according to your plan. You also need a pen and paper.

Remember the two strategies when you draft:

• Keep writing
• Don't edit.

LETTER TO MR PERRY 

Use the information on this screen to draft a letter.

Situation:

Our customer, Mr Robert Perry, deposited a cheque through 'Quick Deposit' into his Premier account. Unfortunately, the name on the cheque (the bearer's name) was not exactly the same as the name on the account. The name on the cheque was Mr Robert Pery (not Perry). As a result, the money was not credited to Mr Perry's account.

Solution:

Mr Perry needs to ask the drawer to write another cheque, making sure the name is exactly the same as on the account card. Then, the money can be deposited into this account.

Account Details:

Name:  Mr Perry

Address:  Flat 3A, Bayshore Tower, Mary's Point, Vancouver

Account No.:  613 556556 888

Cheque No.:  60263

Payee Name:  Mr R Pery

Name on Account Record:  Mr R Perry

When you finish, write "First Draft" on the top margin of your letter. You'll work on the draft later in this chapter and also in Chapters 4-6 and 8.

Revising: Why Do It 

You've now completed your draft, and you're ready to move on to the next stage of the Writing Process: Revise.

Why do you think revising is important?

Revising your writing transforms your unfinished draft into an effective letter that gets results.

In fact, revising is so important that you often need to revise your writing several times. This is the longest stage in the Writing Process.

To see why revising is important, look at the letter below. The writer has forgotten to revise it. As you read the letter, think about the three questions in the box on the right.

As you can see, the writer of the letter may need to send another letter to explain. That is, the letter does not get the intended results.

Revising: How To Do It 

How can you revise your writing?

You've used strategies for all the other stages in the Writing Process. You also can use a strategy for revising.

The strategy you can use for revising is very easy to remember. It's based on the "5 Cs".

Strategy for Revising:

• Complete
• Cohesive
• Clear
• Concise
• Courteous

In fact, to ensure that your letter gets results, you need to revise your letter 5 times. Each time you revise, you'll focus on one of the "5 Cs".

The strategy you can use to revise your writing is very systematic.

You start revising the whole document and then move on to smaller parts such as paragraphs and sentences.

Whole paragraph is complete.

Paragraphs are cohesive.

Sentences are concise, courteous and clear.

下一次，我们将继续讨论怎样将信件写得更完整。