结尾段
To sum up, I would concede that letters are more time-consuming. 1Despite that,the benefits of letters far outweigh its disadvantages. Overall,I am convinced that letters would 2never be replaced,and children should be encouraged to learn to write letters。
问题:
1 第一句话和第二句话之间没有转折关系,怎么用despite。估计学生是想写To sum up, I would concede that emails and phones are more time-consuming. Despite that…
2 never 措辞太绝对。写作时一定要避免绝对化用词,因为容易被critical的英国人找到漏洞。
修改:
To sum up, despite possible benefits brought by modern technology, the benefits of letters, personally speaking, far outweigh their drawbacks. In that case, it’s strongly recommended to perpetuate the use of letters.
评分:
接下来就考生的情况做一个大致评分,仅供参考。
内容(task response):探讨了两方各自的优点,基本达到要求 6分
连贯性(coherence and cohesion):观点和论证之间关系不紧密;语言比较绝对;逻辑关系不够清楚 5分
词汇(vocabulary):拼写错误,用法错误不断 5分
语法(grammar):语法基本过关, 不过句式表达还是比较生硬 6分
总分:5.5分
应对策略
词汇:
1养成习惯看词的英文解释,推荐词典:科林斯。
2 多积累常用搭配,
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